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It’s impossible it seems
Putting into words what I really mean
Chasing abstracts through my brain
Trying to pin them down before I go insane
But my kung-fu grip
Only watches them slip
Away as far as they can get from the confines
Of a phrasing that’s been dumbed down for the average mind
I need to find some way to alleviate
This pressure that’s been building as I meditate
Won’t give me a break
Cognitive particle collisions
Why am I hell bent on philosophical fission?
Crack the skull crack the code
Watch each atom while it explodes
Smattering on the table a wordy mess
Tensions increasing cause I take two steps back with my best
Shot at reasoning these bodiless phenomena
Phantasmal and inexplicable
I thank wisdom for giving me the will
To remain
With these thoughts unnamed
Untamed and wreaking havoc in my brain
Maybe some day they’ll be refined
Every ounce of them adequately aligned to sublime
Upon exposure to the atmosphere.
©2008-2009 ~xyrophiliac
:iconxyrophiliac:

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written on Sept 27, 07

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:iconpeacefulsoul:
This is an 'alright' poem but I would consider some line structure revising. Things seem quite out of line here.

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"Hell belongs in a book
Where the setting is doused with flowers
Upon a field, accompanied by butterflies,
As some random man screams,
“Today’s weather is 50 degrees
With a 101% chance of cloudy skies,
Just to irk the Hell out of it!" -SIRyan-
:iconxyrophiliac:
It´s meant to be spoken with a sense of urgency in a slam poetry type style, so when it´s preformed the chaotic structure is fully intended. thanks for the feedback though!

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-pain is only weakness leaving the body.-
:iconpeacefulsoul:
Odd structure I guess then. No problem.

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"Hell belongs in a book
Where the setting is doused with flowers
Upon a field, accompanied by butterflies,
As some random man screams,
“Today’s weather is 50 degrees
With a 101% chance of cloudy skies,
Just to irk the Hell out of it!" -SIRyan-

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